Tuesday, 23 October 2012

Diabolical Deeds 2: The Cave

The second of Timony’s #DiabolicalDeeds challenges is to write a 100 word story inspired by the deity Calu and two prompt words:


Calu is an Etruscan chthonic deity. He is identified by his wolf attributes, such as a wolf-like appearance or a human with a wolf-skin cap. The prompts are:

cacaesthesia – morbid sensation
caliginous – dim, misty, obscure, dark

The Cave

The cave is rank, caliginous.  I can’t see my hand in front of my face.  “Isn’t it exciting?” Penny whispers by my side. “We’ll get two research papers from this.” I try to smile but I can’t. 

A cold finger traces my spine and I shiver uncontrollably.  Be professional, I tell myself.  This isn’t hell’s mouth, it’s an archaeological dig. From the corner of my eye I see a shadow slip along the wall and jerk round.

”Penny, did you see that?” Silence.  “Penny?”  I turn again. She’s gone. 


In the darkness, I see eyes.

Yellow eyes.


Emilia Quill said...

Love the creeping dread, especially the line " a cold finger traces my spine"

David A Ludwig said...

Hooray! I find your approach of incorporating some of the words conceptually without actually using them very wise in regards to constructing a cohesive narrative.

For some reason I didn't really connect to the "two term papers" thing, but at least it did place the characters' ages and occupations fairly well.

Things got a lot more fun when Calu showed up.

Meg McNulty said...

Yeah, I decided it would interrupt the story too much to use a word if it didn't fit, so I used it as a prompt instead!