Sunday, 10 July 2011

#7Sins Blog Challenge: Gluttony



Day four of Lady Antimony's #7Sins blog challenge and I bring you... GLUTTONY!



GLUTTONY

He died from eating jelly babies. Ten thousand jelly babies, crammed into one squirming, gelatinous, sugar-dusted nursery of a stomach. Blunt, blank faces and round heads, jostling for space in his over-crowded stomach. They said his blood sugar levels were insane; that they found him lying in a pool of syrupy drool outside the cornershop.

Lucifer poked him, his trident leaving dents in the smooth, white flesh. A tormented moan escaped his new soul’s grey lips. Luc grinned. The poor sod’s mind was replaying his last living moment; the bright glare of the shop sign above him: Sweet Temptation.



It's funny where inspiration comes from. Sometimes I have a character in mind, sometimes a plot twist. With this short piece, I had the description of jelly babies humming in my head and I really wanted to use it.

If you enjoyed GLUTTONY, you might want to check out ENVY, WRATH and GREED. You can find them by clicking on #7sins stories.

For other sinful suggestions, check out these excellent writers all taking part in the challenge: Bryce Daniels, Halli Gomez, Rebecca Clare Smith, Braindaze, Glitterword, Rosie Lane, Heather M Gardner, David A Ludwig, Jeffrey Hollar, Surfing (also known as Faith), Zade Forrest, The Gorm, Jessica and not forgetting Lady Antimony herself.

11 comments:

Rosie Lane said...

And another one chock full of great imagery. I'm loving your whole series.

Charity Girl said...

Thanks Rosie!

Halli Gomez said...

I like this one too! Love the imagery!

Charity Girl said...

Thanks Halli! I think this one is strong on imagery, but weak on plot. I had a whole comedy back story going about the devil buying up corner shops but I just couldn't convey it in 100 words.

Bryce Daniels said...

10,000 jelly babies? YIKES!

Excellent slant, I love the trident poking at the new soul.

Gluttony captured brilliantly, and a reminder that no sin goes unpunished!

David A Ludwig said...

"He died from eating jelly babies." You pretty much got Gluttony in 6 words there. I loved it! I think the first paragraph captures the sin perfectly--and I actually knew someone whose situation with zours candy seems similar to this story though without the death. The second paragraph suggests Lucifer's involvement, but really I think it calls for a few more flash fictions with other shops to complete that tale.

Charity Girl said...

Good plan David. The devilish take over of corner shops... like it!

Heather M. Gardner said...

Ugh. I think I went into a diabetic coma!

Your description was wonderfully evil!

I keep hearing the words 'squirming' and 'gelatinous' in my head over and over.

Great job.
HMG

Charity Girl said...

I think it's taking my own jelly baby addiction to the ultimate conclusion. Those smiling little jellies are evil I tells ya!

glitterword said...

Corner shops will never be the same... its almost like tricky fairies really because once you eat their fruit you are trapped in their spell. One jelly baby into 1000... where do they all fit? Very fun!

Antimony said...

I didn't expect Old Nick to turn up, and I'm never eating Jelly Babies. Ever. Or going to a corner shop.

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